Do you imagine that exact moment when your students find success in writing descriptive language? This resource will allow you to present the revision process in an external way. It is a picture book that has a part of the story written in beginning draft form on the left page and the same part of the story retold on the right hand side after it has been revised. The revisions include the use of varied sentence beginnings, vivid words, literary elements, and other important writing skills. The book can be read by reading only the left hand pages to tell the story in unrevised language, or it can be read with the right hand pages to retell the same story as a final draft.
Use this story as an example and reference when implementing the lessons that can be found in the companion book. Each page is an actual transformation of a few sentences and can be investigated and analyzed by students to note the differences. By brainstorming together about this story, students can then use existing pieces of their stories to transform their own writing. These lessons and strategies can be taught in whole group, small group, and with individuals in conference settings.
The result will be to help your students exceed the standard in many of the common core writing standards.