Please check out the preview file for free! One of the struggles in having students write a paper is leading them to revise and edit for specific purposes. Well, I have created a magic bullet for descriptive personal narrative revision! This chart helps students to identify the elements of the genre they have incorporated into their papers, and address the elements they have not incorporated. It guides them to realize that there are more details they can add to their writing, even after they think they are done with the story. I used a few chapters of "Boy" by Roald Dahl, and "A View from the Bridge" by Cherokee Paul McDonald as mentor texts as we began writing our personal narratives in class, so you will notice quotes from those two authors are used on the example page, which I made available to students as they worked on their copy of the chart.
Thumbnails are: 1. First page of student handout, 2. First page of Mentor Text Examples, 3. Second page of student handout, 4. Second page of Mentor Text Examples. The idea is that once students see how an expert author incorporated details, they will find it easier to incorporate specific details into their writing. I made students complete the entire chart, either quoting the parts of their narrative draft where they had already incorporated the detail requested, or writing a sentence or two that they could choose whether or not to add to their paper later. I loved that they were showing me that they could write all the details, but they still had the choice of which to incorporate into their paper- so they still had ownership. This activity was very successful in class. For prewriting, we used the "Prewriting with Shoes" activity and the "Prewriting with Sentence Stems" that are both available on my TPT site. We also revised our verbs to show specific actions, had a lesson on "said is dead" and revised for "we no more than three". The papers were outstanding.