This 12 slide PowerPoint defines and shows (by example) how to edit out vague language for more specific, exact wording. The lecture first presents the rationale for revision and explains how all writers (from beginning, student writers to professional writers) include vague language in their early drafts. Next, it reminds students of the tasks to tackle during revision. The identification and substitution process for editing out vague language is then explained and modeled.
This lesson works best in the middle of an essay writing assignment at the revision stage. Ideally, students should have a draft in front of them that they will revise (independently or with a partner) according to the strategies you presented for independent practice following your mini-lesson.